•Some people suggest higher education should be funded by the government, while others think that students should pay the course fees themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are opposite opinions about university
education
whether it should be financed by pupils or by the government.
Although
the quality of
education
increases with
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personal
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fundings
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, from my standpoint, government-supported colleges reach
large
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number of people and
it
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equal opportunities. In a world
that is
ruled by money, the quality of services is determined by the amount that
being
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paid. As
every
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sector, the standard of schools is
also
closely tied to
budget
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.
This
is where private learning
institues
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institutes
take part.
While
people paying a significant amount of money to benefit from cutting-edge learning methods, the low-budget
institues
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institutes
follow them ten years back. There are numerous methods,
such
as interactive techniques, videos,
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learning methods that ease the learning processes and are time efficient.
Therefore
, investing money is a necessity in terms of receiving a high standard
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.
However
,
education
is the right of every citizen and it must be provided with the resources of the government. Unfortunately, not everybody is fortunate enough to afford paid
institues
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institutes
. In
such
a context, economically disadvantaged individuals need to be supported, skilled ones
in particular
. There are millions of future engineers, teachers, and doctors waiting
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to be seen. Since there is no room to lose even one individual, higher
education
should be met
everyone
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who wants it. In conclusion, in order to receive
high quality
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further
education
payment is a must; yet, reaching
impoverted
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imported
impoverished
students with the power
the
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governmet
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government
is
more
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beneficial investment in future.
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task achievement
Add specific examples to strengthen your arguments, like illustrating a government-funded program's success.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with more detailed explanations and evidence to improve coherence.
coherence cohesion
Clear introduction that presents the issue and your stance effectively.
coherence cohesion
Conclusion effectively summarizes and restates the main points and your opinion.
task achievement
Discusses both perspectives of the issue and clearly states an opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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