The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. • Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the reasons 

why people travel to work by bicycle 

or by car.

• Summarize the information by 

selecting and reporting the main 

features, and make comparisons 

where relevant
The pie chart presents the ratio of people’s rationales
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using bikes and cars to commute to their workplace.
Overall
, most
employees
choose cycling to work to gain physical benefits and decrease pollution.
In contrast
, people choose
using
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cars as commuting by car is comfortable.
Employees
have diverse rationales
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using bikes for commuting. Increasing health and decreasing pollution are the most chosen reasons, those are 30% of each. 15% of bikers choose cycling as they do not need wide space for parking. Other reasons for cycling are the bikers do not need to pay any costs during the way (13%), and
also
they feel cycling takes shorter time on commuting (12%).
On the other hand
, most
employees
choose to commute by car for the comfort of driving, which is 40% of
drivers
.
Besides
,
distance
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between
office
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and
residence
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the residence
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is the main rationale for 21% of
drivers
. Another reason
employees
choose driving to commute is the convenience of carrying their belongings and shorter commuting time compared to cycling, which
are
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14% of each respectively. Some
drivers
feel that driving a car is more secure than biking,
that is
11%. In conclusion, most
employees
choose to bike as biking resulting in healthier physics and reducing pollution. Alternatively, most
drivers
choose to commute
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cars
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since driving gives them comfort
during
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their way to work.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words employees, drivers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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