You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employer In your letter • remind your employer what the course was about • explain why the course was useful to you in your work • suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues

Dear Anna, I
wish
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remind
that
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you that
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I was on
business
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the business
a business
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course
last
week.
This
class was about
time-management
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time management
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, delegation, self-control,
emotional
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and emotional
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stability of middle managers. Of course,
this
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are interesting themes, but the teacher sometimes
was
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not
understandable
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because of her voice, and it was not only my problem,
i
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asked some students about it. Despite
of
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this
problem she is a big professional
of
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coaching, worked with the biggest companies in our region and really can help us to improve our business. I think, that we can learn how to change our structure for the most effective work and will do it.
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, we can delegate some tasks to employees who can do it better. But first of all, we need to know what are colleagues want to do, what are they interested in. Maybe that knowledge can help us and them to understand ourselves and each other and make our company more
effectively
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, but, maybe, we need to
looking
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for another teacher or need more time to
adapting
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Coherence & Cohesion
Try to organize the letter into clear paragraphs, separating each main idea. This will help in presenting your thoughts more logically.
Task Response
Make sure to address all bullet points as asked in the task. Expand on why the course may not be suitable for some colleagues to fully achieve the task.
Task Achievement
You clearly reminded your employer about the course and highlighted its importance.
Task Achievement
The tone of your letter is polite and appropriate for a communication with an employer.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Training program
  • Skill enhancement
  • Job responsibilities
  • Practical exercises
  • Hands-on experience
  • Operational efficiency
  • Subject matter
  • Prerequisites
  • Specialized knowledge
  • Teaching methodology
  • Learning preferences
  • Feedback
  • Course facilitator
  • Professional development
  • Engagement
  • Interactive components
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