Nowadays, more and more people are moving from the countryside to cities in a process known as urban migration. What are some of the reasons for this? What might be the future effects if this trend continues? You should write at least 250 words. You should spend around 40 minutes on this task. Your Task Two Answer:

Nowadays, many
people
have moved to
cities
in order to get a better education or job opportunities,
due to
variety
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of chances there.
This
development benefits
people
by giving them lots of options, as well enhance their education.
However
, that can affect the balance in urban places and individual general health. There are two main reasons
encourage
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people
to move to urban
area
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areas
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.
First,
in contrast
with rural,
cities
offer a large range of schools with many different facilities and majors.
For example
, if a person
search
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for medical or engineering universities, they will definitely find a few in the city, but not in the countryside. The second reason is
the
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that
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cities
give
people
many different job opportunities compared with rural areas, and that's mainly because the big companies and factories always choose
cities
as
place
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places
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for their main offices.
Therefore
, many
people
think it's easy to get
good
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job with
good
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a good
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salary at their
places
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place
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.
As a result
of urbanization, many
cities
now suffer
of
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traffic and noise, which affects them badly.
Furthermore
, there are negative effects on the environment.
According to
most leading health organizations, there is 10% pollution increasing each day in
cities
due to
this
phenomenon. That
increase
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a person
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person
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footprint and
exacerbate
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the effect of the green gases.
This
traffic not only affects
people
,
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but
also
put
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a lot of strain on the governments, because they need to enhance infrastructure by building new roads and houses to handle these numbers.
To conclude
,
although
urbanization has many negative effects on population and government, I personally think its advantages outweigh the disadvantages
,
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because it
let
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people
explore their choices and get
better
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a better
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life. And development
come
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with its drawbacks.
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task achievement
Try to further elaborate on some points to provide a more comprehensive overview, especially when discussing the impact on the government.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a specific idea to enhance clarity and structure.
task achievement
The essay addresses the question by discussing both reasons for urban migration and its future effects.
coherence cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion that effectively communicate the main argument.
coherence cohesion
Logical flow of ideas with adequate paragraph division.

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