Some people say that the main environment on problem for our time is to loss of particulare species of plans an animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.
Losing particular species of animals or affected by many factors not only
plans
is a contentious Correct your spelling
plants
issue
debate, whereas
some people think that the extinction
of them is a major environtment
problem, Correct your spelling
environmental
environment
while
others reckon that there are other problems more crucial. I think environtment
stabilityCorrect your spelling
environmental
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is
extinct
of animals or Correct word choice
the extinction
plans
but Correct your spelling
plants
also
by human activities
.
Overall
, the extinction
of certain flora or fauna
give
Verb problem
has
an
Correct the article-noun agreement
an impact
impacts
impacts
to
the Change preposition
on
environtment
. the ecosystem will be disrupted if one species becomes extinct. Balancing of nature, either flora and Correct your spelling
environment
fauna
leading to environtmental
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environmental
sustainibility
. Correct your spelling
sustainability
For example
, Africa
rhinoceroses Replace the word
African
has
significant ecological Change the verb form
have
impacts
to
biodiversity maintenance. Change preposition
on
Africa
rhinoceroses Replace the word
African
is
herbivores, they help to control vegetation. In my opinion Change the verb form
are
consequently
of
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apply
loosing
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losing
particulare
species of plan or Correct your spelling
particular
fauna
leading
to Wrong verb form
leads
environtmental
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environmental
issue
.
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issues
On the other hand
, other important factors caused
by human Add a missing verb
are caused
activities
. Human activities
also
playing
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play
signigicant
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significant
impacts
to
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on
ecological
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an ecological
the ecological
issue
that threaten biodiversity, disrupt Fix the agreement mistake
issues
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the ecosystem
an ecosystem
ecosystem
and Fix the agreement mistake
ecosystems
endenger
the planet's health. some of the significant issues created by Correct your spelling
endanger
endangered
human
are pollution,deforestation, climate change, overfishing, and urbanization. To illustrate, as people now using cars and other vehicles day to Fix the agreement mistake
humans
days
can produce a lot of Fix the agreement mistake
day
emision
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emission
emotion
as a result
to
climate change.
In conclusion, even thoughChange preposition
of
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the
extinction
of certain plans
or animals can Correct your spelling
plants
effect
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affect
to
ecological Change preposition
apply
issue
, Fix the agreement mistake
issues
however
those not
the only Add a missing verb
are not
one
factors, human Correct pronoun usage
apply
activities
have profound effects to
ecological Change preposition
on
problem
. To state my opinion, the Fix the agreement mistake
problems
extinction
of flora and fauna
give
the same proportion Verb problem
is
with
human Change preposition
as
activities
, Those two things profound
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have profound
impacts
leading to sustainability
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the sustainability
issue
.Fix the agreement mistake
issues
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