Some people say that the main environment on problem for our time is to loss of particulare species of plans an animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

Losing particular species of animals or
plans
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plants
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is a contentious
issue
debate,
whereas
some people think that the
extinction
of them is a major
environtment
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environmental
environment
problem,
while
others reckon that there are other problems more crucial. I think
environtment
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environmental
stability
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is
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affected by many factors not only
extinct
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the extinction
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of animals or
plans
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plants
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but
also
by human
activities
.
Overall
, the
extinction
of certain flora or
fauna
give
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has
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an
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an impact
impacts
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impacts
to
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on
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the
environtment
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environment
. the ecosystem will be disrupted if one species becomes extinct. Balancing of nature, either flora and
fauna
leading to
environtmental
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environmental
sustainibility
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sustainability
.
For example
,
Africa
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African
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rhinoceroses
has
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have
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significant ecological
impacts
to
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on
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biodiversity maintenance.
Africa
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African
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rhinoceroses
is
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are
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herbivores, they help to control vegetation. In my opinion
consequently
of
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apply
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loosing
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losing
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particulare
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particular
species of plan or
fauna
leading
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leads
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to
environtmental
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environmental
issue
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issues
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.
On the other hand
, other important factors
caused
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are caused
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by human
activities
. Human
activities
also
playing
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play
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signigicant
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significant
impacts
to
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on
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ecological
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an ecological
the ecological
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issue
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issues
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that threaten biodiversity, disrupt
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the ecosystem
an ecosystem
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ecosystem
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ecosystems
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and
endenger
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endanger
endangered
the planet's health. some of the significant issues created by
human
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humans
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are pollution,deforestation, climate change, overfishing, and urbanization. To illustrate, as people now using cars and other vehicles day to
days
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day
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can produce a lot of
emision
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emission
emotion
as a result
to
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of
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climate change. In conclusion, even though
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the
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extinction
of certain
plans
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plants
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or animals can
effect
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affect
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to
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apply
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ecological
issue
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issues
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,
however
those
not
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are not
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the only
one
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apply
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factors, human
activities
have profound effects
to
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on
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ecological
problem
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problems
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. To state my opinion, the
extinction
of flora and
fauna
give
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is
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the same proportion
with
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as
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human
activities
, Those two things
profound
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have profound
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impacts
leading to
sustainability
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the sustainability
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issue
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issues
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.
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Revise the organization of your essay to strengthen the introduction and conclusion. Make sure each paragraph introduces and concludes your main points clearly.
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Include more specific examples and details to support your viewpoints, and ensure each example clearly relates to the point you're making.
Coherence and Cohesion
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You've considered both views on the topic, demonstrating complexity in your essay response.
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You provide relevant examples, like the one about African rhinoceroses, which enrich your argument.

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