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Band 2

Many people believe that a university education is necessary for a good career. Do you agree or disagree? What other factors can contribute to a good career? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

For many
years
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 it has been considered
the
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 highest education is the key to a successful career.
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, I would say that nowadays there are
another
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other
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 factors, which lead to successful job opportunities.
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,
apparcely
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apparently
 agree that having
higher
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a higher
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 degree is the only way to have a prosperous career. I agree with
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 statement, because in university students can choose their vocation and
get
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gain
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 new
knowledges
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knowledge
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.
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 institution
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 the way for us to develop our skills.
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, people who
are
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have
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 a diploma conforming
your
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 qualifications will help to find a job faster, unlike those who don’t have
.
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one.
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 Every person has different opinions about
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their
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 personality
qualification
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qualifications
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. Any person finished training with a diploma, which
confirmed
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you
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your
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 skills in
this
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 performance.
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 is not a
full fladget
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full-fledged
 degree.
People’s
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People
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 can
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work hard
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 and find good relationships in society
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, and
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 without proper education, still provide their capabilities. In conclusion, I would say, lifelong learning
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is an integral part of our lives because we receive education throughout our lives, through work, relationships and the goals we set, regardless of where we received
them
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it
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.

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grammar
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structure
Organize ideas with a clear plan: intro, two or three body ideas, and a short conclusion.
content
Give clear examples to back up each idea and avoid odd words or mistakes.
cohesion
Use linking words to help ideas flow from one to the next.
attempt
The writer tries to show both sides of the view.
structure
There is a closing line that mentions lifelong learning.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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