Goverments investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Goverments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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In every country on the earth, there is disagreement around the topic of legal

funds

. With regard to

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topic, few consider legal bodies ought to

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the

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all the money on local facilities rather than spending on arts. I totally disagree with

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contend

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To begin

with, there is no doubt arts bring several substantial things to

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life. Primarily,

art

like music and painting give job

opportunites

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for their daily bread and butter.

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to grow

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the economy of the nations.

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, a recent survey conducted by Times News of India indicates that

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paying

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10% more taxes than small

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in Mumbai city.

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funds

art

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industry;

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working

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on taxpayers.

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artist

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industries

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ways of entertainment. The

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majority

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music after work load which

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unwind from work life. If there

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less entertainment people will

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at home and it will

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to many serious health-related

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paramount for the development of any nation, taking

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task response

Clarify your stance in the introduction. The essay states 'I totally disagree,' but providing a brief rationale will strengthen your position.

task response

Ensure arguments are developed fully. Some points are mentioned without sufficient expansion or examples.

coherence cohesion

Improve grammatical accuracy. There are several minor English errors that occasionally obscure meaning, e.g., 'artiest' instead of 'artists' and 'thing' instead of 'think'.

task response

The essay effectively addresses both sides of the argument, although it disagrees with the statement.

task response

Examples such as the survey in Mumbai City help to substantiate claims.

coherence cohesion

Logical flow and separation of ideas into clear paragraphs, aiding comprehension for the reader.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

251 words

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Goverments investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Goverments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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Most schools give their students grades based on their performance. Why do so many schools utilize this method of student evaluation? In what ways does this affect students?

The spread of urban areas has led to deforestation and has caused many animal species to become endangered. Environmental groups are urging governments to protect these animals. What are the benefits of protecting animals? What can governments do to protect animals?