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There 2 maps of Paradise Island in the past and the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

There 2 maps of Paradise Island in the past and the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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Map
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The map
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 above is the representation of
the
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apply
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Paradise Island in past and its appearance
now a days
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nowadays
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.
Overall
,
beach
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the beach
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, cruise ship,Pier and Rocks remain
same
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the same
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 over the year.
However
,scientific research and natural
spring
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springs
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 are no longer present.A lot of things have been constructed over the years.
Firstly
,
Hotel
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a Hotel
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 complex and swimming pool
has
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have
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 been built in place of
scientific
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the scientific
a scientific
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 research station.
Moreover
,there is an open restaurant and BBQ area
infront
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in front
 of the Hotel.A significant
developments
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development
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 has been observed
on
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in
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 the place where there used to be
natural
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a natural
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 spring,it has been replaced by the Cafe.
However
,there is a newly added cycle track all around the island for cyclists.
there
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There
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 is one more prominent addition in
new
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the new
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 map
that
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which
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 is the
scienic
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scenic
 lookout just beside the cafe.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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