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Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The following plans provide the renovation of Porth Harbour in 2000 and how it looks nowadays.
Overall
, it is clearly classified the differences between the plans,
however
, there were a few changes in the design,
while
 some facilities have been added. Having a closer look at both plans, when entering the Porth Harbour from Main Road, from the first entrance, showers and toilets, and
car
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 park, still exist nowadays,
while
 the Marina private yachts and fishing boats swapped places with each other.
However
, the second entrance from the same road, the car park was reduced, and
then
 another area for showers and toilets have been erected. Looking at the maps from the northwestern side, it is discernable another dock has been added. On the opposite side, the hotel was constructed
instead
 of the Castle,
while
 the public beach shifted into a private one for the hotel. And
finally
, some facilities have been added on the Road
such
 as Cafe& shops
as well as
 the Lifeboat.
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clear ideas
Your main ideas are generally clear, but providing more detailed comparisons would improve comprehension.
structure
Your essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. Adding these would enhance the logical structure.
comprehensive response
The essay includes a comprehensive response, covering all key changes from the year 2000 to today.
main ideas selection
The main features of the harbour's changes are well selected and reported.

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