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Writing Samples
Band 5

Some people think more public money should be spent on roads and motorways than public transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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comtemporary
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contemporary
 world, no one could even imagine life without pathways for cars, bikes or bicycles. Certain groups of people are of the opinion that
tax payers
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taxpayers
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money
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 should be well spent on
roads
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 and motorways rather than on communal transport. I disagree with
this
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 viewpoint and the following paragraphs shall outline my reasons for
this
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 belief. Nowadays, every individual who
are
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 leaving
from
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apply
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their home for jobs
are
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is
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 using
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roads
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the roads
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. The governments are consistently putting the public
money
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 to maintain smooth
functing
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functioning
 of vehicles on
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this
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these
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transportation
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 networks.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, it is evident that authorities have to
secrifice
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sacrifice
 huge
cut
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cuts
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 from their annual budget,
while
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this
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money
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 can be used for several other sectors like Healthcare and education.
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,The Quebec government have to invest twenty
percent
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 of
their
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its
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 budget on new
roads
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 and repairs. As
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this motorways
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this motorway
these motorways
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 are
consistentily
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consistently
 used by everyone, life would have been hell without pathways for vehicles. On the
contary
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contrary
,
equal
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 amount of
money
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 needs to be spent on the public
transportation
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 system.
Firstly
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, not everyone can afford
thier
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their
 own personal vehicles to commute for
day to day
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day-to-day
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 activities. Major sections of the public are largely dependent on
the
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apply
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public transit. It is
convinient
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convenient
 and cheap to travel by local community shuttle.
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, if the government stop
investion
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investing
 in the local
transportation
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, there will be traffic
conjection
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congestion
 and accidents in the city
centers
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centres
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.
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, everyone will bring their own vehicle to work, which will create
delay
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delays
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 in travel.
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, people will not find enough space to park their
vehicle
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vehicles
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.
To conclude
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, it is evident that life would have been
imposible
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impossible
 to imagine without
roads
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 and motorways. But it is important to valve public
transportation
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 like local buses, trains and much more.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to present a more structured argument by using clear topic sentences for each paragraph. This will help guide the reader through your ideas more effectively, ensuring that the logical structure is stronger.
Task Response
Your essay presents a well-defined introduction and conclusion, which effectively bookend the discussion. However, consider briefly summarizing your main points in the conclusion for a bit more clarity.
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Use more specific examples or case studies to support your arguments. This will illustrate your points more clearly and demonstrate a deeper engagement with the topic.
Task Response
The essay begins with a clear statement of your position, which provides a good foundation for your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have outlined two clear viewpoints in your body paragraphs: the importance of roads and the necessity of public transport. This shows a good attempt to balance perspectives.
Task Response
Your conclusion succinctly wraps up your argument, effectively reaffirming your position.
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