You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter:

Dear Tour
operator
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Operator
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, Hope
this
letter finds you well and you are in good health and in high spirits.I am writing
this
letter to tell you that I have
saw
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your advertisement
in
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on
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my phone regarding the
one -week
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one-week
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walking tour in the mountains next week. Well , my name is Navdeep and I am a fitness trainer by profession. So I have
huge
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a huge
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interest
to do
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in doing
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physical activities
such
as walking tours in
mountains
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the mountains
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.But ,sadly my left side knee got broken
while
doing exercise at the gym.
Therefore
,I am
little
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worried about my knee because climbing in the mountains
require
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requires
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a fit body and good stamina.
Moreover
, I want to ask you
that
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is there any doctor team
is
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that is
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going with us. So that if I need treatment
while
climbing they can help me .
Besides
this
, please tell me
is
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there any slot still left because my girlfriend
is
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also
want
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wants
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to join me. Looking forward to hearing from your side and if required you can call me for more information. with regards, Navdeep
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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to clearly separate different ideas into distinct paragraphs to enhance readability and logical flow.
Task Achievement
Ensure that all parts of the task, such as asking questions about the tour and expressing concerns, are fully and explicitly covered.
Task Achievement
The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, making it suitable for formal communication with the tour operator.
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately used, enhancing the formal and friendly tone of the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • brochure
  • interested
  • walking tour
  • concern
  • fitness level
  • keep up
  • difficulty level
  • provisions
  • support
  • participants
  • struggle
  • prepare
  • recommendations
  • improve
  • beforehand
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