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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for goverments to make It a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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 has to be recycled to avoid dangerous issues that might be happening in future .

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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly addresses a specific aspect of the topic. Consider having clearer topic sentences and maintain focus within each paragraph.
Task Achievement
Clarify the purpose and contribution of the examples in your essay to improve comprehension.
Task Achievement
Demonstrate complex structures more accurately to better convey your arguments.
Task Achievement
The essay demonstrates awareness of the environmental impact of waste, specifically the use of plastic.
Coherence and Cohesion
A decent conclusion summarizes the key points and presents a personal judgement on the issue.
Introduction
The introduction sets the tone by addressing the importance of recycling and government laws.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • recycling laws
  • waste management
  • compliance
  • deterrent
  • infrastructure
  • awareness campaigns
  • penalties
  • mandates
  • resistance
  • environmental impact
  • waste disposal
  • sustainability
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