The pie chart below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in this year 2010.

The pie chart below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in this year 2010.
The pie chart compares the percentage of
spendings
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spending
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in five different categories in Japan and Malaysia in the 2010 year.
Overall
, the biggest amount of money in Japan was spent
in
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on
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other goods and services,
while
in Malaysia it was spent
for
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on
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housing.
To begin
with Japan, the smallest expenditure was for health care, 6%. The percentage of
spendings
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spending
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for
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on
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housing and
transporting
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transport
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were
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relatively similar, 20% and 21%. The percentage of consumption for food was higher, 24%. Meanwhile, Japanese people prefer
spent
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to spend
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their money on other goods and services, which showed the biggest result, 29% Regarding Malaysia, the smallest result showed health care, which consisted
3
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%.
Then
little
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bit higher number showed the category of transport, 10%. The costs of other goods and services were almost the same, 26% and 27%. And for
housing
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housing,
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they spent the largest part of their incomes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household expenditures
  • proportion
  • cultural differences
  • economic differences
  • living standards
  • real estate market
  • public transportation
  • private transportation
  • infrastructure
  • government healthcare policies
  • quality of life
  • holistic view
  • inflation
  • economic growth
  • societal norms
  • globalization
  • communication expenses
  • education expenses
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