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Some people think that online education is better than traditional classroom-based learning. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered by some that online
education
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effects
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students
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 more than traditional classroom-based learning .In my opinion, online
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 can bring benefits to
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 ,but sometimes they still need to have
face
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-to-
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education
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. One reason why online
education
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 is great is that
students
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 can choose a suitable and calm place to stay in .
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,
students
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 can choose wherever they can
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 and focus on their online classes .
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 , if there
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 some
students
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 who cannot focus in traditional
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class
classes
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 the noise , they would only get inside their own room which can
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 feel comfortable .
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Another
 reason is that
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also
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 will need less budget .
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 is because their parents will not need to pay their children for transportation and food
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meals
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 to buy financially.
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, sometimes
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 need to have
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face to
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face
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education
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, often they may have difficulty with understanding points through online classes .
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 is to say, often they need to be taught physically to help them to get some tough Points .
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 , in
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the Covid-19
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people around the world started having their
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 online.
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, it was not as beneficial as traditional
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 .
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,
students
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 will be educated more beneficial by
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face to
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face-to-face
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face
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trining
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training
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.
Secondly
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,
To sum up
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 , I believe online is great for
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 ,but sometimes, it has some
limitation
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 which can only be fixed with
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face to
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face-to-face
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face
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education
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Ensure a more balanced discussion by explaining how both online and face-to-face education can complement each other.
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Provide more detailed and varied examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Improve the clarity of your ideas by organizing your thoughts more clearly and cohesively in each paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and smoothly transitions to the next point.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a structured response to the prompt.
task achievement
The argument reflects a balanced view by recognizing the benefits and limitations of both education methods.
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