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the three
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Egypt
saudi
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Saudi Arabia
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and canada
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water
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water
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worldwide, as it results in 97% Change preposition
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water
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,
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water
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the source
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glitter
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ground
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groundwater
water
.
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water
in three
sectors
, they are agriculture
, domestic, and industry
and compared them between three
countries
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Egypt
Saudi
arabia
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Arabia
Canada
). Egypt
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shared
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water
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, Agriculture
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water
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Egypt
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agriculture
sectors
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is used
industry
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the industry
water
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arabia
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is depicted
Canada
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the Industry
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water
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the water
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agriculture
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