The pie chart below shows information about world water resources and the bar chart shows the ultilization of water in egypt, saudi arabia and canada

The pie chart below shows information about world water resources and the bar chart shows the ultilization of water in egypt, saudi arabia and canada
The data
visuals
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world's
water
distribution
along with
the use of
waters
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water
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in
three
sectors
of each country.
Overall
, almost all of
water
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the water
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sources
in
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globally came from the sea which is salt
water
. Among
three
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the three
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countries
, which are
egypt
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Egypt
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,
saudi
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Saudi Arabia
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arabia
and
canada
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Canada
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, there are different styles of consuming
water
in
three
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the three
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same
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apply
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sectors
.
Canada
depict
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as the different one.
Pie
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chart
showed
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shows
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that salt
water
as
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a
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major source of
water
in
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worldwide, as it results in 97%
in
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of
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water
distribution data.
while
,
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it's only 3% for fresh
water
. if we investigated to
analyzed
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analyse
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source
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the source
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of fresh
water
, Ice or
gletser
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glitter
letter
is the major one followed by
ground
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groundwater
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water
. Next to the bar chart, the data depicted the
used
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use
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of
water
in
three
sectors
, they are
agriculture
, domestic, and
industry
and compared them between
three
countries
(
Agypt
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Egypt
,
Saudi
arabia
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Arabia
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, and
Canada
).
Egypt
and
Saudi
arabia
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Arabia
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shared
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share
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the same trend of consumable
water
in
three
sectors
. In both
countries
,
Agriculture
display
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displayed
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as
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the most
water
used compared
than
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to
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domestic and
industry
. There are almost 80%
water
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of water
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used in
Egypt
and 75%
water
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of water
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used in Saudia
arabia
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Arabia
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for
agriculture
sectors
.
While
,
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apply
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the
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apply
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less
water
used
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is used
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in domestic and
industry
sectors
for both
countries
. Surprisingly,
industry
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the industry
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used less
water
than domestic in
Egypt
and
Saudi
arabia
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Arabia
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. A significant
different
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difference
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of
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in
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the use of
water
depicted
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is depicted
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in
Canada
. In
this
country,
Industry
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the Industry
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sector
used
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uses
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the highest percentage of
water
than
agriculture
and domestic. There are almost 80% of
water
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the water
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used for
industry
.
In
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On
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the other hand,
agriculture
only used 10% of
water
in
Canada
and
then
followed by domestic which used
a
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apply
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slightly more
water
than
agriculture
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, three, sectors, countries, egypt, saudi, arabia, canada, agriculture, industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "depict" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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