‘It is important for foreigners to know something about the history and culture of the country they live in.’ Discuss. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the contemporary world of globalization, people are migrating to new destinations for better
lifestyle
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but do they need to learn about the heritage of a
country
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?
This
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essay will discuss why it is important for
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people to know about the
country
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where they live. First of all, since foreigners need to adjust themselves to the new place, it is recommended to know about the nation's details
for example
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its initial civilization, architecture, history etc.
Consequently
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, it will help them in exploring new destinations and accommodate them rapidly in the new environment.
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, if anyone moves to a new place
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a
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work for
long
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the long
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term, they may potentially feel
homesickness
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, to avoid
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feeling, it is always better to keep themselves indulged and the best way to do
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to explore the
country
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Secondly
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,
although
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most countries are
delightful
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to have people from outside their
country
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, foreigners should learn about its cultures and norms
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living in it.
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, it is necessary to make sure not to hurt residents, by doing something that
maybe
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may be
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right for you but not for them.
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, in Iran,
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the majority
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of individuals go through two months of
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mourning because of some historical events. If someone plays
a loud music
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loud music
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or
throw
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throws
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a party
infront
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in front
of them, they will likely not appreciate it.
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, it is better to understand the society a person will be living in. To summarize, there are many challenges for foreigners to travel
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a new place and live
whereas
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most of them can be solved through knowing about
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country's
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the country's
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history, culture etc
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as
feeling
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the feeling
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of leaving behind home or adjusting to a new society.
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task achievement
Clarify your main arguments by making them more distinct. Each paragraph should focus on one clear point regarding why it's important for foreigners to understand the history and culture of their new country.
coherence cohesion
Improve logical connections between ideas to enhance coherence. Use linking words such as 'therefore', 'furthermore', and 'however' more effectively to show the relationship between ideas.
task achievement
Develop your ideas further. Spend more time exploring each of your points in detail, providing more specific examples or theoretical cases to support your claims.
coherence cohesion
The introduction outlines the essay's focus well, stating a clear position on the topic.
task achievement
Provides relevant examples that help support the main ideas, such as the Iran culture example, which adds depth to the text.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear and logical organization overall, with introduction and conclusion present.

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