Deforestation is considered one of the major environmental problems. What are the causes and effects of deforestation? What solutions can be put in place to address this issue ?
Nowdays
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Nowadays
deforestation
is considered as
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apply
a
one of the main Change the article
apply
ecologically
issues.Change the word
ecological
This
essay will discuss how infrastructure
and agriculture are the main cause
of Fix the agreement mistake
causes
this
problem,and the most viable solutions are regenaration
and substitution Correct your spelling
regeneration
the
material with
similar ones.
The main cause of Change preposition
of the
this
problem is infrastructure
that exists and improving Add an article
the infrastructure
an infrastructure
dramaticaly
, annually in the whole world. Correct your spelling
dramatically
In other
words
most of the materials Add a comma
words,
using
for Wrong verb form
used
infrastructure
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are mades
mades
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made
by
timbers,
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of
also
another reason is Add a comma
also,
massive
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the massive
using
the land Wrong verb form
use
in
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for
agricultural
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an agricultural
way
.In the Fix the agreement mistake
ways
future
it can lead to Add a comma
future,
the
lack of Correct article usage
a
the
natural areas, Correct article usage
apply
increasing
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increase
volume
of polluted air, affect on natural cycle negatively. Correct article usage
the volume
For example
in 2019 years in Vietnam
government decided to join Change noun form
Vietnam's
to
the list of the “most 50 Change preposition
apply
devoleped
counties”, Correct your spelling
developed
then
started to use 67% of Correct word choice
and then
land
Correct pronoun usage
its land
to
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for
the
Correct article usage
apply
infrastructure
, at the end
country had a lot of constructioned
areas, but no more rich base of flora and fauna, they had lost 25 types of biological diversity.
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construction
Possible
solution is to Add an article
A possible
restabilishing
the cut
woods.In Correct your spelling
establishing
reestablishing
fact
used areas will not be able to Add a comma
fact,
use
again in the future for 50 years, but if Wrong verb form
be used
deforestation
standards will
change a little bit, Verb problem
apply
it
could regenerate by Correct pronoun usage
they
itself
, Correct pronoun usage
themselves
that
is proven that if Correct pronoun usage
It
woods 'll be
cut more than 1 metre they will grow again by themselves.Another way to deal with Wrong verb form
woods are
this
issue is to substitution
with some similar material, like aluminium. It is the cheapest, Replace the word
substitute
competitive
type of metal that shows more ability to replace the original one. Correct quantifier usage
most competitive
For example
in 2020 in New Zealand deforestation
have
affected Unnecessary verb
apply
on
air pollution, the compound of the air contained 32% of oxygen, Change preposition
apply
68
% of nitrogen,Correct word choice
and 68
as
a result Correct word choice
and as
of
citizens had to wear specific masks for 2 Change preposition
apply
month
.
In Change to a plural noun
months
conclusion
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conclusion,
infrastructure
and agriculture are the major causes of deforestation
and the suitable solutions are regeneration and substitution of the materials in use.Submitted by akzharkynzhamal on
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coherence cohesion
Provide clearer topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to help guide the reader and ensure logical flow between ideas.
task achievement
Elaborate more on the potential solutions mentioned (e.g., how regeneration could be encouraged or specific examples of material substitution).
task achievement
Work on refining language use for increased clarity and precision.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, both of which effectively frame the overall discussion.
task achievement
Good use of examples to support points, such as the reference to Vietnam and New Zealand.
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