It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while other believes that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

Some
people
believe that living in urban areas
are more
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preferable,
whereas
other
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of
population
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are of the view that rural areas
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better to inhabit. In my opinion, life in
city
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center
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is
more
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superior as there is plenty of opportunities for growth.
This
essay will discuss both points of view. On the one hand,most
of
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people
prefer metropolises because of
thehigh
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the high
access
for
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higher
education
institutions,
depsite
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despite
the fact that the costs are much high in
metropolis
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. A lot of international
universities
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branches are located in
a
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a city center
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city
centers
therefore
, a lot of students from
towms
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towns
move to
city
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the city
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center
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to get a good quality
education
.
For example
,
according to
the statistics of the University of Westminster, more than 60% of students are from different regions of Uzbekistan and they provide
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accommodation
for
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students.
Nevertheless
,
population
density is quite high and there is intense competition among
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which drives the cost of
services
.
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, IMRS reported that the price of rent increased by 2,4% in September as demand increased during
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.
On the other hand
, another part of humanity
think
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rural
city
life is better as there is less noise pollution,
however
, the accessibility to medical
services
is hard.
People
struggle with traffic noise and noise from constructive sites in
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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while
inhabitants of
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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enjoy the voice of nature
such
as waterfalls, singing birds, and whispering
leafs
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leaves
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. At the same time, rural area
population
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populations
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struggle with
the
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limited access to medical
services
, namely hospitals and clinics.
People
spend a lot of hours on the way in order to get to the
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experienced doctors. To
examplify
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exemplify
, In
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20% of
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the hospital
a hospital
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hospital
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hospitals
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located
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are located
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in rural communities and 60% of
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the hospital
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hospital
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hospitals
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located
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are located
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in
city
centers
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centres
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. In
conclsuion
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conclusion
,
city
inhabitants
are
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accessible
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to higher
education
however
the prices are too high.
Nevertheless
,
village
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the village
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population
enjoy quiet and peace in their areas but they need to drive
long
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a long
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way to the healthcare
services
. I think life in
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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is better as it is important to get
good
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a good
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education
for future growth.
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grammar
Ensure that subject-verb agreement is correct, e.g., 'living in urban areas are' should be 'living in urban areas is.'
coherence
When transitioning between ideas, use linking words or phrases to create a smoother flow.
introduction conclusion
Provide a clear and detailed introduction that outlines the main points you will discuss.
introduction conclusion
Strengthen your conclusion by briefly summarizing the discussed points before presenting your opinion.
examples
Good use of specific examples to support main points, such as statistics from the University of Westminster and IMRS.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
  • ecological footprint
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