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It is generally agreed that the amount of waste created by humans today is a worldwide problem. What do you think are the main causes of this situation? What measures can be used to tackle this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Today, in the world we all are living, one of the problems is the amount of
waste
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 created by us.
This
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 phenomenon has come
as a result
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 of the development of the
industry
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 and the increase
of
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in
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 human consumption. To resolve
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 problem the government and
the
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society
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 have to take measures. First of all, the
industry
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 has developed a lot worldwide but
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 comes with its negative aspects. The pollution and the wastes the
industry
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 produces have a negative impact
for
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on
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 the water,
for
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on
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 the soil and
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for
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on
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 human health. For the production of different
crops
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crops,
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 the
industry
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 uses additional pesticides which affect the soil but at the same time
people
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's health by causing various problems
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 as cancer or autoimmune diseases.
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, lifestyle has changed and
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this
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reason
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reason,
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people
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 consume more than before. They tend to buy more clothes and
to
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throw away many others because of the lack of space in their houses. Nowadays, when
people
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 go shopping they do not use their personal shopping
bag
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bags
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, but each time they buy a new one. All these products increase the amount of
waste
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 and its consequences.
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,
this
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 important problem should be controlled as soon as possible. Both the government and
society
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 have to act to reduce
waste
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 created by humans all over the world. The authorities should implement policies for recycling and composting all the wastes
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industry
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the industry
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 and
society
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 produce.
To
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 all the fabrics that have a high risk of
pollution
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pollution,
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 they ought to introduce higher taxes, which would force the
industry
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 to take measures on
waste
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 management.
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,
people
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 should be more motivated to buy
second hand
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second-hand
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 items and donate used goods, rather than just putting them away. They all have to use reusable grocery bags
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not just for groceries but for everything they buy or take home.
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 will reduce the use of plastic and will help our environment from unnecessary consumption.
To sum up
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, the amount of
waste
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 created by humans is an important global problem. The principal causes are the development of
industry
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 and the increase of
human’s
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human
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 needs and consumption .
For reducing
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this
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 phenomenon, both the authorities and
society
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 have to take major actions.

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task achievement
Consider providing more specific examples to support your points, such as actual statistics or case studies related to waste management or consumer behavior.
task achievement
Try to develop your ideas further to convey clear and comprehensive arguments. For instance, elaborate more on how exactly government policies might be implemented or enforced.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smoother transitions between paragraphs to enhance the logical flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Your essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion on waste management.
task achievement
You address the question fully by discussing both the causes of waste creation and potential solutions, demonstrating a good task response.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-organized with distinct paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect, which contributes to overall coherence.

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