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Band 4.5

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps beneath provide the venue of Southwest
airport
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Airport
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 at present and how it will appear after renovations the following year.
Overall
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, a significant
number
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 of contemporary facilities are to be established
as well as
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 the area of
an
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the
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 airport is set to be modernised and expanded for the convenience of tourists. Currently, the map reflects a layout aimed at a small
number
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 of travellers. There is a check-in zone in the left corner and a cafeteria in the top right corner of the current map. These facilities will be relocated. The cafeteria will be replaced by a check-in zone, locating the bottom left corner. A new bag-drop area is predicted to be located near
passport
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the passport
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 control and security area to facilitate handover the handover of travellers’ bags.
In addition
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, new shopping stalls are expected to be constructed for passengers
need
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who need
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 to purchase necessary items. The
number
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 of gates
are
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is
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 estimated to be doubled.
According to
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 the latter picture,
a
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the
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number
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 of gates is planned to increase from 8 to 18.
In addition
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, passengers will make
a
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apply
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use of convenient a sky train
instead
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 of a walkway. In
arrivals
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the arrivals
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 zone, new food-cord, ATM and car-rental stalls are to be opened up. After reaching the destination, the air-tourists may have
option
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the option
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 to have a meal, exchange money, and even rent a vehicle.

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clarity
Consider rephrasing some of the sentences to enhance clarity. For example, in the introduction, 'a significant number of contemporary facilities are to be established' could be simplified to 'many modern facilities will be added.' This will make your ideas clearer to the reader.
structure
Make sure each paragraph has a clear focus and topic sentence before introducing further details. This will help the reader understand what the main point of each paragraph is without getting lost in the details.
content
Your essay provides a comprehensive overview of the changes to the airport, effectively summarizing the main features of the development plans.
task achievement
You have successfully identified key changes such as the relocation of facilities, increase in gates, and introduction of new services. These are relevant comparisons and provide a clear picture of the redevelopment.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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