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You recieved a letter from your friend that his elderly parents are visiting in your city. Which places they should visit Where should they live Invite them to do something with you

#friend #parents #city #places #visit
Dear Rahul, It has been ages since
last
 we communicated. I
Hope
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 you are doing well in your life and
your
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you
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 are in good health and in high spirits. I am writing
this
 letter to welcome your parents
in
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to
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 my
city
 and suggest some places to them as they are going to visit next month.
Firstly
, I would recommend
you
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 that
lalit
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 is the best hotel in my
city
 so without any doubt you should check their website and book the room .
Besides
this
 ,
hotel
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the hotel
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 location is near
to
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the
city
 so they can easily go
the
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to the
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 restaurant
any
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at any
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 time .
Moreover
, there is a big mall in my
city
 which is one of the biggest
mall
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 in North America I would suggest
you
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that they definitely visit once .
In addition
 to
this
, there are plenty of restaurants available there so that they can eat their favourite food.
In the
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last
, but not least I am inviting your parents
at
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 my home so that I can spend some time with them and share my gossip with them. Looking forward to hearing from you . With love Navdeep
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task achievement
Add more specific examples about the tourist spots or attractions they should visit in your city. This will enrich your letter and give the parents clearer guidance on what to experience.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to the minor grammatical inaccuracies such as verb tenses or plural/singular noun forms to improve clarity and accuracy.
coherence cohesion
Use connecting words or phrases to better link your ideas, particularly in the paragraph transitions to improve flow and logical sequences.
coherence cohesion
You have a warm and friendly tone, making your letter feel inviting and personal.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are effectively included, helping to frame your letter well.
task achievement
You successfully address all parts of the prompt by suggesting places to live, visit, and extending an invitation.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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