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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose higher taxes on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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task achievement
Ensure that your essay directly addresses the prompt. While some sections of your response seem off-topic (such as the information about a course offering), try to focus more on discussing the effects and implications of fast food consumption, reflecting on both sides of the argument mentioned in the task.
coherence cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences to introduce the main points of each paragraph. Ensure that each paragraph logically connects to the next and contributes to a cohesive overall argument.
coherence cohesion
Strengthen your conclusion by succinctly summarizing your main points and stating your position clearly. This will help improve the coherence and cohesion score.
coherence cohesion
Good use of structure in listing benefits, which shows an ability to organize information clearly. This skill can be applied to supporting an argumentative point with structured reasoning.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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