The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas of a European country between 1987 and 2007.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas of a European country between 1987 and 2007.
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The chart below gives information on external tourists,who travelled
three
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various regions in a European country,namely the coast,the mountains and the lakes within 20 years period. Looking at an
overall
structure,it is readily apparent that,the indications of the coast prevail in the beginning and end of the period.
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,the mountains
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observed
attracting with
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the fewest visitors,
while
the lakes experienced inconsistent levels over the years. On the one hand,the coast was the most preferred area,that people visited in 1987 by 40.000,experienced a slight decrease to 35.000,
then
increased steadily and peaked at 75.000 in 2007.As for the mountains,it was visited by 20.000 individuals in 1987,
then
with moderate growth to 30.000 in 1997.The tokens remained stable until 2002,
finally
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a minimal rise,reaching approximately 35.000. With regards to the
last
one,the lakes,there
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dramatic
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rise,which went up from 10.000 in 1987 to 40.000 in 1997
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The number of overseas visitors reached
at
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peak level
roughly
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75.000.Till the ultimate period,it
was underwent
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with
gradual
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a gradual
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drop to 50.000.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • number of
  • areas
  • European country
  • between
  • 1987 and 2000
  • graph
  • introduce
  • overview
  • trends
  • describe
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • summarize
  • main findings
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