Question- Buying tickets on the internet such as books, air tickets and groceries is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this outweigh the disadvantage

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Online shopping provides convenient ways to buy many things

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as books, groceries and tickets. It became popular among

people

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due to

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the accessibility and

comparable

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however

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, the drawback

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as an increase the

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is something to be considered.

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essay will discuss both advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, online shopping provides a convenient way for shopping, it takes less time because they are going nowhere for the transaction. It is because the transaction can be done in one single marketplace and

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people

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can compare supplies from other marketplaces or online stores to get the cheapest price.

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, in Indonesia, there is the largest e-commerce named Tokopedia which includes many online stores with various categories of items, it has a feature to sort the items by their price and popularity, which allows the consumers to find an item.

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although

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it makes shopping easier, it increases

people

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's consumption and makes excessive buying.

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due to

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the fact that

people

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can be interested only by looking at ads on social media and buying

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, they are

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social media trends and feel the urge to buy

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them

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immediately. A feature in a marketplace named flash sales,

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, makes excessive buying because it

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cheaper prices

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they do not actually need them.

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To conclude

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, online shopping provides a convenient transaction method,

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, it

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makes

people

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do impulsive buying.

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, I believe the advantages still outweigh the disadvantages because

people

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can prevent impulsive buying by checking out only what they really need.

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Provide a clearer thesis statement in the introduction to outline your position more directly on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that directly relates back to your thesis statement.

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Provide more detailed analysis and explanation in your main points to enhance clarity.

coherence cohesion

The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which aids in a coherent structure.

task achievement

You provided relevant examples, like Tokopedia in Indonesia, to support your points.

coherence cohesion

The conclusion effectively summarizes the key points of the essay.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

265 words

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