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Social Media websites have amassed large user bases, and have become the sole source of information for their users. Do the advantages of being a part of a social media site outweigh the disadvantages?

Social
Media
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 applications have amassed huge user bases and have become the main source of
information
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 for their users. from my perspective, the privileges are much more than the damages. owing to, the safety, easy-to-find
information
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 and how rapid it is. First of all, social
media
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 websites sh ould have
information
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 about the users
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 whether those who use the account publish a post
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 not authorized or have cyberbullying someone
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, they can prevent
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.
Additionally
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, there are injustices and dark sides which require to be stopped by the workers to protect people's rights.
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, Twitter is an application
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 everyone can post and write everything, so those who work on it can delete user's
accounts
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 and sue them.
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 of all, the usage of Social
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 is massively growing, and
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this
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,
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users can obtain some
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while
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 using
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 for
some
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education
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 stuff and learning.
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, some argue
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that
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 is not a reliable source and they ought to watch the news on television or read newspapers.
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, there are some
accounts
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 that are trusted to rely on them,
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, some
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 are owned by the government which means it is safe. To illustrate, an enormous number of people count on
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 that have permission to post everything about schools and holidays.
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, the positives are nowhere near as astronomical as the negatives, Social
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 is safe from rumours and lies.
furthermore
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, whoever does something bad, will be punished.

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logical structure
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complete response
The essay addresses the task by discussing the advantages and disadvantages of social media correctly.
clear comprehensive ideas
Your ideas are clear and relevant, particularly when discussing cyber safety and information reliability.
relevant specific examples
You have provided specific examples, such as Twitter's handling of unauthorized posts, which add depth to your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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