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The cart below shows favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015

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The chart illustrates the most liked delivery
food
 of people in
Canada
 and the number of Indian restaurants in
Canada
 from 1960 to 2015. The
first,
pie chart shows the most
favorite
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 cuisines in the whole world in
Canada
. There are two global trends
,
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 so in the first place located Japanese
food
 with almost 35
percent
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.
However
,
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it goes Indian
food
 quite popular,
as well as
 Japanese with around 25
percent
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. Actually, there are approximately more than eight cuisines but only two lead
this
 pie chart.
Nevertheless
, Indian cuisine only reached its peak of fame in 2007 but there are a lot of work was done in the period from the 1960s till 2007 and restaurants
had
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 been constantly opening in
this
 period. That helps to improve the popularity and recognition of the
food
 in
Canada
.
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Task Achievement
Ensure you include an overview of the main trends in the data. For instance, summarize key patterns and changes over the period.
Coherence and Cohesion
In the body paragraphs, increase the logical separation of ideas perhaps by ensuring every paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence summarizing the paragraph's main idea.
Task Achievement
Try to include more specific data or examples from the chart to support your points more thoroughly.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay provides an organized response with a clear introduction.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a logical flow of ideas from introducing the data to analyzing trends over time.
Task Achievement
You proficiently identify major global trends from the chart, focusing on the popularity of Japanese and Indian cuisines.

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