Your local council has decided to close the only park in your town and build a car park in its place. You believe this will have a bad effect on the people who live and work in the town. Write a letter to the mayor. In your letter introduce yourself explain why you think the decision is wrong say what you think the council should do instead

Respected Mayor, I am a responsible
resdient
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resident
residents
of
this
town. I am writing to express my views on the closure of the only park. Since I am a nature lover person who
visit
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this
park on
daily
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a daily
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basis
along with
numerous other
people
so
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apply
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I believe
this
modification will make us, the
resdients
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residents
, unhappy. As
this
is the only natural place, where
people
can go alone or with families for
walk
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a walk
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and can spend quality time in nature
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therefore
turning it into
a
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parking will create a
lot
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difficulies
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difficulties
to
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for
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the
people
using it
everday
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everyday
every day
. Like, children won't find any place to play and aged
people
might begin to stay inside
of
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the
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houses as there would be no place to go for
walk
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a walk
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or relax.
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means
people
from
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all ages will
get
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affected
negetively
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negatively
.
Instead
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it is suggested, to make
street paid
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parking and
hence
people
will not exploit it too.
Otherwise
, just make a parkade out of the old gas station which is not in use
from
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for
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years. So that
people
are not devoided of one basic park in
whole
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town. I hope the
voice
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of locals
would
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be heard. Regards Simran.
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task achievement
Ensure to proofread your letter for spelling mistakes such as 'resdient', 'difficulies', and 'negetively'.
coherence cohesion
Avoid using incomplete phrases like 'nature lover person', and focus on concise, clear expressions.
coherence cohesion
Consider more orderly transitions between points to improve the flow.
task achievement
The letter effectively acknowledges the closure of the park and the impact on residents.
task achievement
The letter makes suitable recommendations to the council as requested.
coherence cohesion
Your tone is polite and formal, which fits the context well.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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