Your local council has decided to close the only park in your town and build a car park in its place. You believe this will have a bad effect on the people who live and work in the town. Write a letter to the mayor. In your letter introduce yourself explain why you think the decision is wrong say what you think the council should do instead
Respected Mayor,
I am a responsible
resdient
of Correct your spelling
resident
residents
this
town. I am writing to express my views on the closure of the only park. Since I am a nature lover person who visit
Change the verb form
visits
this
park on daily
basis Correct article usage
a daily
along with
numerous other people
so
I believe Correct word choice
apply
this
modification will make us, the resdients
, unhappy.
As Correct your spelling
residents
this
is the only natural place, where people
can go alone or with families for walk
and can spend quality time in natureAdd an article
a walk
Add the comma(s)
, therefore,
therefore
turning it into a
parking will create a Remove the article
apply
lot
Add the preposition
lot of
difficulies
Correct your spelling
difficulties
to
the Change preposition
for
people
using it everday
. Like, children won't find any place to play and aged Correct your spelling
everyday
every day
people
might begin to stay inside of
Change preposition
apply
the
houses as there would be no place to go for Change the word
their
walk
or relax. Correct article usage
a walk
Which
means Correct pronoun usage
This
people
from
all ages will Change preposition
of
get
affected Verb problem
be
negetively
.
Correct your spelling
negatively
Instead
it is suggested, to make Add a comma
Instead,
street paid
parking and Add a hyphen
street-paid
hence
people
will not exploit it too. Otherwise
, just make a parkade out of the old gas station which is not in use from
years. So that Change preposition
for
people
are not devoided of one basic park in whole
town.
I hope the Change the article
the whole
voice
of locals Fix the agreement mistake
voices
would
be heard.
Regards
Simran.Wrong verb form
will
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task achievement
Ensure to proofread your letter for spelling mistakes such as 'resdient', 'difficulies', and 'negetively'.
coherence cohesion
Avoid using incomplete phrases like 'nature lover person', and focus on concise, clear expressions.
coherence cohesion
Consider more orderly transitions between points to improve the flow.
task achievement
The letter effectively acknowledges the closure of the park and the impact on residents.
task achievement
The letter makes suitable recommendations to the council as requested.
coherence cohesion
Your tone is polite and formal, which fits the context well.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.