Scientists believe that computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some say it is a positive development while others say it is a negative development. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some scientists believe that
computers
are becoming more intelligent than human beings. Some people believe that it is
positive
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development and others consider it
as
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a negative development. I personally think that
although
computers
have made us lazy because half of our
works
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can be done by them,
computers
actually
savde
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save
saved
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time because they work faster than us.
Computers
save
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time because they can perform faster than us.
Computers
can solve mathematical problems faster than humans and ,
therefore
, humans perform more efficiently in the office. We can complete our work more easily and
efficienty
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efficiently
than in the past and get some extra spare time.
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corporate companies,
computers
are hugely used to solve problems, and people complete their
task
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times
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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider structuring your essay with a clear introduction that outlines the main points you will discuss. Currently, the essay starts abruptly, which may confuse the reader.
Coherence and Cohesion
Present a clearer conclusion that summarizes your opinion and the main points discussed, to provide closure to your argument.
Task Response
While you have presented your opinion, make sure to equally discuss both perspectives on computer intelligence before presenting your own viewpoint.
Task Response
Enhance the essay with relevant examples for each viewpoint you're discussing. This will help in making the argument more persuasive and balanced.
Task Response
The essay presents a valid opinion on how computers save time and improve efficiency.
Task Achievement
Good explanation of how computers can assist in the workplace through their computational abilities.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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