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The continued rise in the world's population is the great problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the cause of this continue rise?Do you agree that is the great problem faced by humanity

Nowadays, it is widely known that the population in the
world
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 is
continuesly
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continuously
 rising. I agree that
this
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 increasing trend of
world
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poplulation
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population
 results in several challenges for
the
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humanity
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.
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, I support the idea that there should be some steps taken by the government to control the rising population.
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 with,
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 rise is mainly a result of
lack
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a lack
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 of
knowladge
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knowledge
 among people about the consequences of overpopulation. The very first and one of the most important
problem
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problems
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 that may be faced because of
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 s is
lack
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the lack
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 of food resources.
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 may lead
humanity
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 to
drastical
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drastic
drastically
 consequences like
starvity
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starving
 in overpopulated areas of the
world
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.
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 the reports of BBC, India, one of the most populated countries of the
world
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 started to experience the food resource lack problem even nowadays.
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is
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should be an important call for raising
avaraness
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awareness
 about the
concsuions
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conclusions
 of overpopulation.
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, the ongoing
increace
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increase
 in birth rate may later help diseases to spread at a faster rate which is
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 not a satisfying result for
humanity
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. An example can be
COVID-19
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the COVID-19
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 virus that’s origin come from China which is a country with
high
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a high
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 population. The
world
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 overpopulation
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,
further
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 triggered the spread of the virus to be faster.
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, I believe above mentioned consequences of an overpopulated
world
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is
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are
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 a great threat
for
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to
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humanity
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 and steps should be taken to prevent
this
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. These may be raising
acknowledgment
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acknowledgement
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 about the expected results of
high
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the high
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 rate of birth or some regulations prohibiting maximum child numbers in a family.

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general
Pay attention to spelling and grammar errors; ensure words are accurately written to maintain professionalism in your essay.
task achievement
Include more specific data or studies to strengthen your arguments about overpopulation issues.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to maintain a clear flow of ideas.
structure
Your essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion.
task achievement
You have presented relevant examples to support your points, such as the reference to COVID-19 and India.
coherence cohesion
Overall content is organized logically, and your arguments are clear and understandable.
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