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Band 3.5

Some people think education is important, but others disagree. What can you say for yourselves?

Society mainly approves that
education
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 plays a key role in people's
life
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lives
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. Having
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a
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good
education
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 you are becoming well-developed, which is valued in work, communications, and other fields.
Firstly
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, it would be
simplier
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simpler
 in a job, when you are ready
for doing
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to do
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 any task, and your abilities allow you
while
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 completing a task, be assured that the objective you gain, will be completed successfully without mistakes. It is exactly the reason an
education
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is
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so highly estimated in a society, as it gives almost full freedom of action. The better the
education
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, the more opportunities it gives. Speaking in terms of opportunities, it means
that
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 amount of money that you will be paid, strongly depending on
an
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your
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education
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's quality. On
this
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 basis, we could say, that
success
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the success
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 rate, is
binded
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bound
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 to
amount
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the amount
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 of spent time.
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, good academic performance and
education
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 not only
gives
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give
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 you a perfect job, but a product you will work for, will be much better, considering your knowledge. The advantage you will be given through
well
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good
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 grades
,
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 is unquestionable,
therefore
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 significant number of people usually strive to efficiently graduate from high school and university. In conclusion,
i
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firmly agree that
education
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's requirement is the main attribute of well-being
life
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in life
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 and apparently, there is no more crucial thing, that makes you so useful in every sphere.

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task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples to support each point you make. This helps to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next; consider linking ideas more effectively for better flow.
coherence cohesion
Avoid minor grammatical errors to enhance the clarity of your essay, such as paying attention to subject-verb agreement.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear stance on the importance of education, making the writer’s viewpoint easy to understand.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion clearly frame the essay, providing a logical start and finish.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the essay is generally well-organized, with distinct sections for different points.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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