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The use of social media such as Facebook or Twitter is replacing face-to-face contact this century. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In every country on the earth, there is disagreement around the topic of social
media
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. With regard to
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 topic, few consider,
nowadays
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that nowadays
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, social
media
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 like
facebook
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Facebook
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 or
instagram
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Instagram
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 is affecting in-person social contact.
According to
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 my perspective,
this
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 development has more pros than cons.
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 with, social
media
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 has
a
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apply
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substantial
numerous
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benefits in human life. Primarily, in
this
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 contemporary era, many people live far away from their
life
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lives
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 for various reasons
such
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 as going
foreign
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to foreign
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 nations for higher education or
for
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to
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 work in international companies;
therefore
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, social
media
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 aids them
connect
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 with their family members. They can call or see their loved ones any
time
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 through video calls.
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, in the past folks
use
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used
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 letters which
take
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took
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 a lot of
time
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;
hence
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 because of
lack
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a lack
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 of communication individuals who lived outside their
counrties
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countries
feel
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felt
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 homesick.
Likewise
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, social sites assist folks to find their old friends online searching their names only.
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, a recent survey conducted by
Time
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 News of India in Mumbai city indicates that almost 80% of people do video calls to their loved ones
everyday
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.
On the contrary
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 side, there is no doubt social
media
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 has
detrimental
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a detrimental
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 effect on society. First and foremost, social
media
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effected
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affects
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 social
gathering
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gatherings
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 in society. Many individuals do not prefer
to
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family functions especially the young generation because they prefer to spend their
time
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 online, talking and
chating
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chatting
 with their peers. In a nutshell,
undoubdely
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undoubtedly
 social sites have some pressing effect on society,
nevertheless
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, if people use social
media
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 carefully, it has more advantages than disadvantages.
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