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Band 8

A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: -Give contact detail for when you are away -Give instructions about how to care for your pet -Describe other household duties

I am writing
this
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 letter to request that you look after my house
while
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 I am going out of the country. Meanwhile, if you can stay at my home, feel free to contact me at 123456789
this
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 number. I might not be able to talk to you on the phone every time, but you can leave a message. I will call you back. As you know, my pet Tiffy has a habit of going out for a walk every evening. If you could do that for me, that would be helpful.
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, Tiffy only likes crackers in the morning, and they are in the first drawer in the kitchen just above the sink. There is a lot of work to do in the house, but I will not bother you.
last
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 but not least, please give my plants water on a daily basis because I love my plants, and it is on the balcony. If you do not give them water, they will die. I hope you will do
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 for me. Thank you for helping me. Yours loving, Love

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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider starting with a greeting like 'Dear [Friend's Name]' and add a closing before your name, such as 'Best wishes'. This makes your letter feel warmer and more personal.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use clearer paragraphs. For example, keep pet care instructions together and household duties in another section. It helps in making your ideas easier to follow.
Task Achievement
You might want to add more details about how to care for Tiffy, like walking times, and add a list of chores if you can. This improves the completeness of your response.
Task Achievement
You did well in providing contact details, which is very important in a letter like this.
Task Achievement
Your tone is friendly and caring, which is great for this kind of message.
Coherence and Cohesion
You used simple and clear language, which makes it easy to read.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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