You are going to have a party. You would like to invite a friend who lives in a city that is a long way from your home. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: ▪️Explain why you are having the party ▪️Describe your plans for the party ▪️Suggest how your friend can travel to the party and where he / she can stay

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Dear Jasmine, I am writing to invite you to the party, I am holding at my home

for

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finally

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receiving

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my Permanent Residence

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the

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apply

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Canada. Before, I was sceptical

for

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about

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celebrating it or not. But

then

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I thought it

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was

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actually time to celebrate my hard work and determination

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I arranged a get-together. Since all our friends are usually free on weekends

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apply

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it is planned

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for

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Saturday, 2nd

november

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Also

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, I already know that your job

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gives you off on

friday

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Friday

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sunday

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, so it will

great

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for you too.

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it is not going to be long

but

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I will try

everyone

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so everyone

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can enjoy and have

good

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a good

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dinner at my home. Since you are

little

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a little

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far from me. I would suggest you

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apply

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come by sky train as it is

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faster than the buses. Even if you want you can come to my house and can stay overnight as it would be difficult to get train on weekends.

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but not least, I

truely

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truly

hope that you can be present with me at

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special moment of my life. I will be eagerly waiting for you. Regards Simran

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Coherence and Cohesion

Work on creating clearer paragraph breaks for each idea to improve the logical flow.

Task Achievement

Consider rephrasing for conciseness in some parts of your letter.

Task Achievement

You have successfully covered all required points: explaining the reason for the party, outlining the plans, and suggesting travel options.

Coherence and Cohesion

The greeting and closing of the letter are polite and appropriate for an informal invitation.

Task Achievement

There is a clear, friendly tone throughout the letter, appropriate for writing to a friend.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

194 words

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