You are going to have a party. You would like to invite a friend who lives in a city that is a long way from your home. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: ▪️Explain why you are having the party ▪️Describe your plans for the party ▪️Suggest how your friend can travel to the party and where he / she can stay
Dear Jasmine,
I am writing to invite you to the party, I am holding at my home
for
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to
finally
receiving
my Permanent Residence Wrong verb form
receive
of
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in
the
Canada. Before, I was sceptical Correct article usage
apply
for
celebrating it or not. But Change preposition
about
then
I thought it is
actually time to celebrate my hard work and determination Wrong verb form
was
therefore
I arranged a get-together.
Since all our friends are usually free on weekends so
it is planned Correct word choice
apply
on
Saturday, 2nd Change preposition
for
november
. Change the capitalization
November
Also
, I already know that your job also
gives you off on friday
to Change the capitalization
Friday
sunday
, so it will Change the capitalization
Sunday
great
for you too. Add a missing verb
be great
Although
it is not going to be long but
I will try Remove the conjunction
apply
everyone
can enjoy and have Rephrase
so everyone
good
dinner at my home.
Since you are Correct article usage
a good
little
far from me. I would suggest you Correct article usage
a little
to
come by sky train as it is Remove the particle
apply
more
faster than the buses. Even if you want you can come to my house and can stay overnight as it would be difficult to get train on weekends. Change the word
apply
Last
but not least, I truely
hope that you can be present with me at Correct your spelling
truly
this
special moment of my life. I will be eagerly waiting for you.
Regards
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Coherence and Cohesion
Work on creating clearer paragraph breaks for each idea to improve the logical flow.
Task Achievement
Consider rephrasing for conciseness in some parts of your letter.
Task Achievement
You have successfully covered all required points: explaining the reason for the party, outlining the plans, and suggesting travel options.
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are polite and appropriate for an informal invitation.
Task Achievement
There is a clear, friendly tone throughout the letter, appropriate for writing to a friend.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite