You are going to have a party. You would like to invite a friend who lives in a city that is a long way from your home. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: ▪️Explain why you are having the party ▪️Describe your plans for the party ▪️Suggest how your friend can travel to the party and where he / she can stay

Dear Jasmine, I am writing to invite you to the party, I am holding at my home
for
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finally
receiving
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my Permanent Residence
of
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the
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Canada. Before, I was sceptical
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celebrating it or not. But
then
I thought it
is
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actually time to celebrate my hard work and determination
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I arranged a get-together. Since all our friends are usually free on weekends
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it is planned
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Saturday, 2nd
november
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.
Also
, I already know that your job
also
gives you off on
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to
sunday
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, so it will
great
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for you too.
Although
it is not going to be long
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I will try
everyone
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can enjoy and have
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dinner at my home. Since you are
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far from me. I would suggest you
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come by sky train as it is
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faster than the buses. Even if you want you can come to my house and can stay overnight as it would be difficult to get train on weekends.
Last
but not least, I
truely
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truly
hope that you can be present with me at
this
special moment of my life. I will be eagerly waiting for you. Regards Simran
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Coherence and Cohesion
Work on creating clearer paragraph breaks for each idea to improve the logical flow.
Task Achievement
Consider rephrasing for conciseness in some parts of your letter.
Task Achievement
You have successfully covered all required points: explaining the reason for the party, outlining the plans, and suggesting travel options.
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are polite and appropriate for an informal invitation.
Task Achievement
There is a clear, friendly tone throughout the letter, appropriate for writing to a friend.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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