You are planning to travel and would like someone to take care of your apartment while you are away. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter •explain why you will be away •ask your friend to take care of your apartment •describe the tasks you want your friend to do

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Dear Jasmine, I am writing to tell you that I am planning to fly to India on Diwali as it's been four years since I celebrated Diwali in

hometown

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my hometown

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. Before I was sceptical about going to India but my parents really

want

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wanted

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to celebrate Diwali with me. As I will be away so I need someone to take care of my apartment from 1st November to 20th November.

Although

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I have other friends

but

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apply

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I think you are the most responsible, closest and reliable

from

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all of them. It would be great if you

can

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could

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help me to look after my place

while

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I am not here. Since you are

also

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occupied with your things, work and studies, I want to assure you that

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there

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is not a lot to do there. I will

handover

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hand over

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my keys to you before I leave. I would be happy if you

can

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could

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help me

giving

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by giving

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water to plants,

open

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opening

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windows for ventilation and

collect

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collecting

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my emails from the

mail box

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mailbox

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. That's all

that is

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required to be done.

However

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, you can contact me whenever you want. I will be grateful for your help. Regards Simran

preetsimran0123Sat Oct 26 2024

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Coherence

Consider using more varied sentence structures to enhance the coherence of the letter.

Coherence

You might add a short closing sentence to summarize your request or express anticipation for a positive response.

Coherence

Be careful with word choice: consider changing 'I have other friends but' to 'While I have other friends, I feel that you're the most responsible...'.

Task Response

The letter format is appropriately friendly, maintaining a suitable tone for writing to a friend.

Task Response

You effectively included all relevant information: your reason for travel, request for help, and specified tasks for your friend.

Coherence

The letter has clear and logically ordered paragraphs, making it easy to follow.

5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

192 words

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