The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The data illustrates
percentage
share Correct article usage
the percentage
if
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of
Brazil
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Brazil's
economy
between 2009 and 2019 from five different industries and forecast
for 2029, and there are some differences which are set out below.
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forecasts
First,
in 2009, Brazil
’s economy
had a higher statistic with 31% in finance
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the finance
sector
, which
from food processing industry only had Correct word choice
while
10
% contribution to the Correct article usage
a 10
economy
. In
the other hand, manufacturing companies contributed 21% slightly lower than the tourism and oil, coal and gas Change preposition
On
sector
which contributed 25% to economic development in Brazil
.
Secondly
, 2019
data was Correct article usage
the 2019
differences
from the industry in Replace the word
different
Brazil
, there was a slight growth in the financial sector
of 36%, still outplayed to
the other five sectors. Change preposition
apply
Moreover
, the contribution of manufacturing to the economy
was decreasing to only 15%, that
makes the smallest contribution to the Correct pronoun usage
which
economy
. It follows that,
food processing had Remove the comma
apply
significantly
growth and was the same figure as the tourism Change the adverb
significant
sector
at 21%. Furthermore
, oil, coal and gas placed the second highest position for the economy
, contributing of
31%.
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apply
Lastly
, Brazil
has forecast
forCorrect article usage
a forecast
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