The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The data illustrates
percentage
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the percentage
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share
if
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of
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Brazil
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Brazil's
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economy
between 2009 and 2019 from five different industries and
forecast
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forecasts
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for 2029, and there are some differences which are set out below.
First,
in 2009,
Brazil
’s
economy
had a higher statistic with 31% in
finance
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the finance
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sector
,
which
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while
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from food processing industry only had
10
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a 10
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% contribution to the
economy
.
In
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the other hand, manufacturing companies contributed 21% slightly lower than the tourism and oil, coal and gas
sector
which contributed 25% to economic development in
Brazil
.
Secondly
,
2019
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the 2019
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data was
differences
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different
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from the industry in
Brazil
, there was a slight growth in the financial
sector
of 36%, still outplayed
to
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the other five sectors.
Moreover
, the contribution of manufacturing to the
economy
was decreasing to only 15%,
that
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which
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makes the smallest contribution to the
economy
. It follows that
,
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food processing had
significantly
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growth and was the same figure as the tourism
sector
at 21%.
Furthermore
, oil, coal and gas placed the second highest position for the
economy
, contributing
of
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31%.
Lastly
,
Brazil
has
forecast
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a forecast
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for
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