Punishment is the best approach to teach kids what is good and bad. Do you agree or disagree. What are the other options do teachers and parents need to follow, provide some examples

There are many types of
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in how to educate
children
for good
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, one of them is
punishment
.
Punishment
often comes when the
children
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misbehave and do not follow the parents's instructions,
while
it can be effective, I believe that
sometime
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better
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a better
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approach can be taken.
Punishment
is a negative reward, it
constitues
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constitutes
a representation of the
unstatisfaction
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dissatisfaction
of parents, its purpose is to lead the kids to think about their previous actions and to change
it
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.
Punishment
can be shown in different ways,
for example
,
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the time using technology devices
such
as
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computers
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or
smartphone
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smartphones
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, or
dont
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not
allow
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them to hang out with friends.
However
, I think that there are better approach
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doing the same thing, which is to alter their course of action when
children
do bad things, and it is a positive reward,
for instance
, to
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them more time to play or
being
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with friends, as long as they do better, and act nicely. I assert that taking something extra can lead the child to understand that he needs to work
for achieving
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something.
To sum up
, there are two 2 ways to educate
children
for good
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, and they are positive and negative rewards,
while
both of them are effective, the first has more
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merits
like
signal
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a signal
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to them that for getting stuff in life we need to do something in return.
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Incorporate more specific examples to illustrate your points, especially when discussing alternatives to punishment.
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Provide a more comprehensive analysis of both the advantages and disadvantages of using punishment versus positive incentives.
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Enhance transitions between paragraphs to improve overall coherence and cohesion of the essay.
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The essay addresses the prompt by discussing both punishment and alternative approaches for teaching children.
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An attempt is made to conclude the essay with a summary of the points discussed.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • discipline
  • positive reinforcement
  • rewarding behavior
  • emulate
  • kindness
  • patience
  • respect
  • explanation
  • consequences
  • non-punitive strategy
  • time-outs
  • open communication
  • express feelings
  • emotions
  • impactful
  • generous
  • unacceptable behavior
  • calm down
  • alternative actions
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