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Band 4.5

Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that other media are better sources of news. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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world
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beginning
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Meadia
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media
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world
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newspaper
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the newspaper
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best
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the best
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 way to know
newas
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news
. others
are believe
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believe
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media
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the media
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 is
better
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a better
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sources
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source
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get
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a
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news
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news
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. I will explain
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viewe
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view
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world
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 is growing
smart
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teachnology
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technology
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people
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have used
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teachnology
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technology
for
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know
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newses
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pieces of news
items of news
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.
people
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 do not like to see
paper
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 because they have smart
teachnology
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technology
. when we
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papaer
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paper
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baggage
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literate
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paper
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reduce
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. publisers
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the
paper
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on there
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there
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their
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wesite
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website
therefor
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therefore
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user
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users
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 do not buy to see
newspaper
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the newspaper
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. and
paper
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publish
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publishing
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higher
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a higher
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then
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than
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publishe
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publishing
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nawadays
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nowadays
. social
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meadia
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media
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a
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now
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know
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news
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wheile
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while
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somthing
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something
happaned
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happens
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world
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second
secont
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 we can know about that
news
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. it is
a
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very
pupular
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popular
. it has
facebook
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youtub
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youtube
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website
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a website
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. some
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paper
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papers
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meadia
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media
too
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to
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websit
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websites
 and social
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meadia
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media
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newas
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news
.
people
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use
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easly
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easily
easy
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news
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meadia
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media
.
becaus
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because
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use
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verious
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various
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usage
therefore
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people
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. reading
sikills
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skills
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increas
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increasing
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people
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My
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openion
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opinion
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meadia
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second
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second
 so. if we
use
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news
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quikly
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quickly
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use
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paper
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. we can improve our
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writing
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articles
article
 and stories.

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Improve the introduction and conclusion so they clearly state your opinion and summarize the main points discussed. This will help create a more cohesive structure.
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Work on organizing your essay using clear paragraphs for each main point you discuss. Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and flows logically into the next.
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Strengthen your examples by making them more specific and relevant to the points you are discussing. This will make your arguments more convincing.
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Make sure to review your grammar and spelling to avoid mistakes that could affect the clarity of your ideas. Consider having someone proofread your work if needed.
general advice
Take the time to thoroughly plan your essay before writing. This will help in organizing thoughts and producing a more structured response.
task response
You attempted to address both views, which shows good understanding of the task requirements.
relevant content
The essay presents an attempt to discuss how technology impacts news consumption, which is relevant to the topic.
task response
Your essay attempts to conclude with your own opinion, which is important for task achievement.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trusted source
  • credibility
  • in-depth analysis
  • detailed coverage
  • background information
  • expert opinions
  • viewpoints
  • tangible
  • offline alternative
  • instant access
  • real-time updates
  • diverse formats
  • interactivity
  • user interaction
  • community engagement
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