Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how? You should give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge to support your response.

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To enhance task achievement, consider elaborating more on the importance of local languages with specific examples, such as cultural or societal benefits.
coherence cohesion
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task achievement
Your essay presents a clear stance on the importance of both global and local languages, which is well articulated.
coherence cohesion
You provided a good conclusion, emphasizing the importance of mother tongue and global languages in education.

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