The most important aim of science should be improve people's life.

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Scientific innovation is the most purpose to
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daily life. At
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we are passing days by using different types of useful gadgets and
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which are so convenient and it is increasing
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. I completely agree with
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statement and I am going to demonstrate some relevant points in support of my standpoints. There are a number of innovations happening all over the world and it is rising significantly, but
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scientific innovation aims to improve
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people's lives.
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scientists have the nature to discover new things which
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to assisting daily work.
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, Dynamite was invented for mining but now it is
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known as the ingredient of weapons which has threatened any country.
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many scientists do research
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in
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particular things which have more advantages
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as Nano robots tend to aim for medical recharge. Most of the research is actually based on our daily purposes how is it more suitable and can reach
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stages people. But many discoveries are built for useful situations so that it can reduce the risk but it is actually used for harmful works.
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, the telecommunication system has been
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that it is
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more essential
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it is
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used for
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by terrorists for commenting on
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. So, the main radical point is that scientists aim to
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new things
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improve
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daily life, but we will understand it when it
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use
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, innovations are a blessing when it would be useful or necessary.
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, it should
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people's
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every scientist.
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