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Rise in Homeless persons across England between 2010 and 2016.

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The graph illustrates the rise in homelessness across
England
, focusing on
London
, the
rest
 of
England
, and the country as a whole from 2010 to 2016.
Overall
, homelessness increased consistently across all areas, with the highest growth in
England
 as a whole, followed by the
rest
 of
England
,
while
London
 maintained the lowest numbers throughout. In the first few years, the total number of homeless people in
England
 rose steadily, going from 2,000 in 2010 to around 3,000 in 2013. The
rest
 of
England
 followed a similar trend, increasing gradually from about 1,500 to 2,000 by 2013.
London
,
however
, saw only a slight increase, from around 400 to 500 during
this
 period. From 2014 onward, the trend became more pronounced. By 2016, homelessness in
England
 reached approximately 4,000,
while
 the
rest
 of
England
 climbed to around 2,500.
London
 peaked at about 800 in 2015 and
then
leveled
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 off, indicating a slower rate of increase compared to other regions.
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introduction conclusion present
Include a brief conclusion to wrap up the main points discussed in the essay.
complete response
Provide a bit more analysis or insight into the possible reasons behind the data trend. This could enhance depth and task achievement.
relevant specific examples
The essay includes clear and specific data points derived from the graph, demonstrating a solid understanding and representation of the information.
logical structure
There is a clear progression in the explanation of data trends over time, contributing to a well-structured essay.
clear comprehensive ideas
The essay effectively distinguishes the trends between different areas, aiding in a comprehensive understanding of the topic.

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