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The bar chart shows the amount of energy generation in four countries from 1985 to 2000

The bar chart shows the amount of energy generation in four countries from 1985 to 2000
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The bar chart provides information about the quantity of generated energy by the wind in ( India, Denmark, Germany, and the United States )in the years 1985 to 2000.
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, at first glance, it is strongly evident that Denmark and the US experienced an upward trend
while
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 Germany and India showed a downward trend during the period. According
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 the graph Denmark is considered the most common in energy generated by wind in 2000 by 1700.
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initially
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 decreased sharply to almost 300 in 1985.
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 it increased gradually all over ten years. At the same time, the US ranked in the second position by 15000 in 2000. It
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 had some fluctuations in the
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 two years.
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, the rate of generated energy in India and Germany declined at the beginning of the period and
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 it grew steadily approximately 1200 and 900 respectively.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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