Buying things on the internet, such as groceries, books and air tickets is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping this way outweigh the disadvantages.

Nowadays, In the world
bussines
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business
is
growth
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growing
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verius
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very
type.
generally
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generally,
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many people buy some
things
on the
internet
. In
this
bussines
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business
is growth day to day. It has advantages and disadvantages. I will
expalin
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explain
both of
view point
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viewpoint
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.
Firstly
, we can buy
things
from
Internet
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the Internet
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a
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lot of
type
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types
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of websit
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websit
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websites
,social
meadia
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media
,
buying
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and buying
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app.
those
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are easy to buy all
things
. we can not
spent
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spend
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money
to travel and
tiard
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tired
card
. when we
in
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apply
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the home my order
idrems
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items
dreams
will come
our
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to our
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home
queikly
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quickly
quietly
. when we go
to shop
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shopping
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we can not get our selection
things
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of things
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in the shop. but we can choose our thing
internet shops
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internet-shops
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and it will be
cheeper
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cheaper
. when we buy
the
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apply
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things
we can not deal with
owner
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the owner
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.
money
transection
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transaction
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also
very easy to buy
things
.
therefore
we can buy anywhere form in the world.
Moreover
,
Internet
bussines
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business
has disadvantages. when we order one
tidem
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item
and size they will send
anothe
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another
idem and size
Is
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It
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is
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it
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very difficult to
buyear
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buy
. some time
oder
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does
not come our hand but we
payed
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pay
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so we have to
lost
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lose
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our
money
.
sometime
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sometimes
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we can not
findout
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find out
things
qualty
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quality
and quantity sheller can do
robary
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rotary
probably
work
therefore
we will
lost
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lose
be lost
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more
money
. sheller will
shell
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apply
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damage
things
to us.
while
we have to
carefull
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careful
carefully
in
this
internet
buying. In
conclution
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conclusion
,
Internet
bussines
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business
has
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have
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both
side
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sides
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of view
therefore
we have to know about both before
a
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apply
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buying. When did not know
to
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what to
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buy after we
have
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had
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to worry about that.
threfore
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Therefore
we want to know about
internet
bussinse
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business
advantage
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advantages
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and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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for our
futur
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future
.
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Grammar and Spelling
Work on spelling and grammar. Common errors include 'bussines' (should be 'business'), 'verius' (should be 'various'), and 'tiard' (should be 'tired').
Examples
Provide specific examples to illustrate the points more clearly. For instance, describe a personal experience or a well-known example of online shopping.
Development of Ideas
Ensure to develop each main point with supporting details or explanations. For example, explain why online shopping can be cheaper or the process of money exchange.
Language and Vocabulary
Use more varied sentence structures and vocabulary to enhance clarity and interest.
Punctuation
Review punctuation placement, as more consistent use of commas and periods will help in structuring ideas clearly.
Content Balance
You've effectively covered both advantages and disadvantages of online shopping, showing a balanced approach.
Structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, setting the stage and summarizing the main points.
Task Response
You addressed the task and provided points in response to the question, demonstrating understanding of the topic.

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