Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of planets and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In every country on the
earth
, there is disagreement around the topic of environmental issues. With regard to
this
topic, few consider that the extinction of specific
species
of
animals
and plants are
almarming
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alarming
environmental problem,
while
others opine that other
envrionmental
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environmental
problems are more pressing. In
this
esssay
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essay
, I will discuss both
perspective
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and provide my opinion.
To begin
with,there is no doubt all the
animals
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animal
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and
plants
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plant
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species
are substantial. Primarily, all the
species
are connected to each other and play an improbable role in each other lifespans.
Likewise
, the food chain is totally
depend
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upon all the
species
.
For example
, a recent survey conducted by Time News of India indicates that if the number of
harbivours
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herbivores
harbours
animals
increased
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increases
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and carnivours
decrease
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decreases
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it will
effect
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the environment in numerous ways. On the
controry
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contrary
, Undoubtedly, other
environment
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environmental
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issues are
an
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apply
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urgent
issue
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issues
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. First and foremost,
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warning is one of the biggest
concern
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concerns
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these days. Because of
glabal
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global
warning
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warming
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the earth
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earth
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earth's
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temperature is
rised
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raised
rising
day by day and
sea
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the sea
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level is
increased
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increasing
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which effect all the life on
earth
. Many
species
can not
toleret
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tolerate
high
temperature
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temperatures
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and
consequently
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consequently,
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many
species
are vanishing from
other
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others
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.
For instance
, an article written by The University of New York reflects that the
earth
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earth's
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temperature is rising by 2% each year which is an urgent issue. In a nutshell,
according to
my understanding extinction of particular
species
of plants and
animals
are
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is
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interconnected with other environmental issues.
Hencoforth
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Henceforth
, if
human
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humans
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try
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to protect the environment,
nevertheless
, the
extionction
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extinction
of
species
will be prevented.
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task achievement
Try to refine your grammar and spelling to improve clarity and readability, focusing on common errors such as "glabal" to "global," and "toleret" to "tolerate."
coherence cohesion
The essay successfully introduces both perspectives on the issue and includes a conclusion which summarizes the writer's opinion.
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There is a clear effort to discuss both views and provide a balanced perspective.
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