The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts give information about how different 6
factors
makes
most people happy Correct subject-verb agreement
make
in
two different ages .
Change preposition
at
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that achievement at work was the most significant part of makes
people happy at all ages . In comparison to the other Wrong verb form
making
factors
was the smallest segment in two
pie charts .
Correct article usage
the two
Resident
under 30 , Achievement at work made up the biggest part of the chart which qualified Fix the agreement mistake
Residents
to
31 % . Doing hobbies dropped to 22% respectively. Having a good appearance was the smallest a minority accounted for 18 percent . Other Change preposition
for
factors
and travelling were the smallest segment
other Change the noun form
segments
factors
was 14% and travelling was 15% .
Population over 30 years old have lowes contributed in all factors
. Achievement at work also
was the largest segment for people over 30 which qualifier
to almost a third. Correct your spelling
qualifies
While the
least significant part Correct word choice
The
in
Change preposition
of
factors
was the other factors
accounted
for one in ten . Financial security these figures rose to a fifth. Doing hobbies had a slight growth of 24% . Being with family declined by a minority Wrong verb form
accounting
14
% .Change preposition
of 14
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