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Learning a foreign language offers an insight into how people from other cultures think and see the world. The teaching of foreign language should be compulsory at all primary school. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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One of the most pressing issues in modern society is learning a foreign
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 important of our studies agent. It has been suggested that the number of foreign
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 which is teaching compulsory at all primary
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. To my mind, I think
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 is a partially positive trend and other cultures think and see the world. From an
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foreign
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important for every person because it is an international
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Spanis
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Spanish
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 and
native
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language
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, Every school has permitted to
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foreign
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. A good illustration of
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students
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do
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 learn
foreign
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 they will not suffer
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 other countries. It
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not only
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to
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students but
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improve
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to
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countries.
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, there are several
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 against foreign
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 of
cultural
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seeing
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 the world.
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students
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 is teaching
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 their
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education system,
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cultural
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activites
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activities
,
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countries'
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 information, and so on.
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, a learner will go to overseas who is not
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foreign
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, he will not face any
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 like, like he
speak
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fuleantly
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fluently
. In conclusion, foreign
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 future.
However
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, I feel that the best way to
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this
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 issue is by learning
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foreing
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foreign
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. If the authorities
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this
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 policy, it will provide a better life for future
generation
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generations
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.

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task achievement
Ensure that main points are supported with relevant and specific examples or arguments. This will strengthen the essay's persuasive power and clarity.
task achievement
Provide a more comprehensive and nuanced response to the statement. Consider discussing potential downsides or challenges to compulsory foreign language education.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow and clarity of individual paragraphs. Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, coherent idea.
coherence cohesion
Use clear topic sentences and linking phrases to guide the reader through your argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, framing the discussion and summarizing the main points.
task achievement
The essay demonstrates awareness of the broader benefits of learning a foreign language, such as cultural understanding and enhanced international communication.
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