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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018

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The graph below shows the
number
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 of
shops
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 that closed and the
number
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 of new
shops
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 that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018 The graph represents the
amount
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number
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 of closed
shops
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 and
also
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 the
number
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 of opened
shops
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 in a particular country within a certain
time
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 period, where the x-axis represents the
time
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 period of 2011-2018 and the y-axis is for the
amount
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number
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 of
shops
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 that started from o and ended in 9000.
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, trends of opening
shops
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 tended to have more ups and downs throughout the
time
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 where the line indicating closure of
shops
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 faced less fluctuation compared to the other. In 2011, more than 6000
shops
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 were opened in that particular city, which reached the peak of
its’
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its
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 growth in 2013.
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, a tremendous fall happened to the phenomenon in 2015, with a
number
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 less than 1000.
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, after
times
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time
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, the trend got stabilised in 2018 with a
number
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 slightly above 5000.
Shops
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 seemed to become closed more at the beginning of 2011.
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, the lowest
number
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 came in 2012, when a
number
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 of 4000
shops
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 were recorded as closed.
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, after having a zigzag line,
at the end
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 of the timeline, the trend finished with the lowest
number
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 of closing
shops
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 in the entire
time
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 period, having 3000 closed
shops
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 in that city.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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