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The bar chart shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries from 1985 to 2000.

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The bar chart shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries from 1985 to 2000.
The given bar chart compares the amount of energy generated by wind, in terms of
megawatts
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, in four different nations over a 15-year span from 1985 to 2000.
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,
it is clear that
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 all figures showed an upward trajectory throughout the period. It is
also
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 evident that the US had the highest data in the initial year,
whereas
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 Denmark witnessed the most dramatic growth among the others. In detail,
the share of
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India accounted for 200
megawatts
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 in 1985, compared with 400 for Germany.
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, both of these figures experienced an increase
,
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 India rose slightly to 400
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,
while
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 Germany
to
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rose to
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 just over 600
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 by 1990.
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, by the end of the timeframe, India increased gradually to 1200
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, but Germany to approximately 850
by
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 2000.
Following
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this
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 trend, the remaining countries, namely Denmark and the US, both of which experienced an increase.
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, the US
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 had the highest data in 1985 with 1200
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, before reaching its peak of 1650
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 in 1990.
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, the US
after
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, after
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 reaching
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its peak
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peak
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peak,
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 recovered
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subsequently
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to 1520
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 by the end of the timescale.
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, Denmark stood
just
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 over 200
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 in 1985, but
then
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this
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 was followed by a
further
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 rise to
similar
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a similar
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 pattern as the US by 1990 at 1650
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 over a
15 year
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15-year
 period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words megawatts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wind energy generation
  • megawatts (MW)
  • renewable energy
  • energy production
  • growth trend
  • decline
  • technological advancements
  • government policies
  • historical data
  • relative contribution
  • energy mix
  • comparison
  • renewable resources
  • sustainability
  • capacity
  • installations
  • annual production
  • percent increase/decrease
  • between 1985 and 2000
  • notable changes
  • country-specific trends
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