The best way to increase road transport safety is to make vehicle drivers take a driving test each year.To what extent do you agree/ disagree

Safety in transportation is a highly popular topic
due to
the rise of accidents on the roads.Some people support that the best way to increase road transport safety is to make vehicle drivers take a driving
test
each year.Personally,
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disagree with
this
statement, which will
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in
this
essay. On the one hand,there are several reasons why taking a driving
test
annually is not a good method in order to increase road transport.The first reason is that it causes
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of time and
money
. If
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drivers book a driving
test
every year, they will have to pay a huge amount of
money
to pass their
test
,
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they have to encounter many difficulties in order to save their
money
. Another reason is that
this
is useless for many
vehicles
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owners, who are already familiar with all traffic rules.Taking a driving
test
is only
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of time for drivers who already have experience in controlling the situation and have
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to pass the
test
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.
Moreover
,
government
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should use
this
money
to invest
other
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areas in order to increase the safety
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traffic.
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, some
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have bad road conditions, appear many holes, which can cause
accident
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accidents
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.So these
place
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really need the government
invest
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coherence cohesion
Include a conclusion to summarize your arguments and positions clearly.
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Focus on more comprehensive ideas that cover both sides of the argument before concluding definitively.
introduction conclusion
Your introduction is effective in stating your position clearly on the topic, which helps set context for the rest of the essay.
supported main points
You have attempted to give reasons for your disagreement, which shows good engagement with the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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