Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There are different opinions regarding who should be responsible for teaching the
children
how to act the best in the
society. Ones suggest that family is the primary source of learning social skills, Correct article usage
apply
however
the other opinion is that schools and teachers play the leading Add a comma
however,
role
here.
On one hand, children
of school
age spend a significant amount of time in the education facilities communicating with teachers as well as
other students. Given quite a large number of classmates and their different background
, Fix the agreement mistake
backgrounds
pupil
learn Fix the agreement mistake
pupils
for
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apply
a
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apply
team work
, Correct your spelling
teamwork
to
listen to Fix the infinitive
apply
a
different opinions and acquire Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
problem solving
skills that are required to be good members of society. Add a hyphen
problem-solving
Moreover
, in most schools
there are Add a comma
schools,
such
disciplines as ethics, history
, where Correct word choice
and history
children
can acquire knowledge of different social behaviour
. Fix the agreement mistake
behaviours
In addition
, school
can offer additional social events, Fix the agreement mistake
schools
for
example
volunteering. Add the comma(s)
example,
This
adds additional experience on
various social models.
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in
On the other hand
, parents are the main people in child‘s
life from the very beginning. Starting from Correct article usage
a child‘s
the
early childhood, kids try to be Correct article usage
apply
alike
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like
to
their parents and mimic their Change preposition
apply
behavior
. Parent‘s Change the spelling
behaviour
values
, such
as kindness, empathy, responsibility, willingness
to support others influence as well child‘s attitude. Mother and father are the main people who know their Correct word choice
and willingness
children
best and during daily comunication
can make Correct your spelling
communication
impact
on Add an article
an impact
children
‘s values
. It‘s worth noting that children
learn from the examples, so parents
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parents'
parent's
values
are communicated to the children
throughout daily activities.
In conclusion, even though a school
and teachers have a significant role
in child‘s
social education, I think that the family‘s Correct article usage
a child‘s
role
here is crucial. In my opinion, the main values
and learn
come from the family and Wrong verb form
learning
school
has a supportive role
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Try to provide more specific real-world examples or situations to back up your points.
coherence cohesion
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task achievement
The essay presents a balanced discussion of both sides of the argument, which is essential for this task type.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clear and match the content of the body paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
There's a logical flow to the essay with clear connections between ideas, especially between parent influence and school influence.
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