The Internet dominates free-time for too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socializing with others. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowdays
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Nowadays
internet
became
a big part of our Wrong verb form
has become
life
, many Fix the agreement mistake
lives
peoples
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people
use
it everyday
and I don't know any place where I can't find any network Replace the word
every day
exept
some regions. For Correct your spelling
except
me
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me,
internet
is a source of interesting information for self-growing and learning new insights. Since 2010 or earlier whole
my family started to Correct word choice
apply
use
internet
for easier communication between different Add an article
the internet
cityes
or countries. Correct your spelling
cities
I'm disagree
that's whole Change the verb form
I disagree
internet
prevent
people from socializing but we have a social Correct subject-verb agreement
prevents
medias
which Correct your spelling
media
made
communication between people unrealistic Wrong verb form
makes
and
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apply
for example
when my mother or girlfriend use
social network
like Facebook, Instagram etc. it's difficult to reach them, Fix the agreement mistake
networks
and
it looks like they based anywhere but not near me.
But regarding my experience 2 years ago Correct word choice
apply
that
I Correct word choice
apply
prefered
to Correct your spelling
preferred
use
social networks mostly to spent
my free Change the form of the verb
spend
time
for
Change preposition
apply
scroling
different videos, photos, posts etc. without any Correct your spelling
scrolling
sence
, and Correct your spelling
sense
science
I'm
decided to remove all my accounts from social Verb problem
I've
medias
, so now I have only accounts in different Correct your spelling
media
messangers
which required for my work and no more social Correct your spelling
messengers
medias
.
I Correct your spelling
media
belive
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believe
that is
peoles
will understand there is nothing better than Correct your spelling
peoples
people
the
nature among us. After Correct article usage
apply
the
removing social Correct article usage
apply
medias
from my Correct your spelling
media
life
I started to Add a comma
life,
spent
more Change the form of the verb
spend
time
for
interesting activities Change preposition
on
such
as walking around the forest/park spending
my Correct word choice
and spending
time
with a
family and friends, Correct article usage
apply
also
often at he night I'm driving
a car and just Wrong verb form
I drive
looking
at the city lights which helped me to improve my menthal health and made my life more colorfull.
I Wrong verb form
look
recomend
Correct your spelling
recommend
to
everyone track their screen Change preposition
that
time
,
Remove the comma
apply
and
spend no more than 2 hours per day Correct word choice
apply
for
Change preposition
on
diferent
online Correct your spelling
different
activites
and try to see how Correct your spelling
activities
beutifull
Correct your spelling
beautiful
world
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the world
around
us.Add a missing verb
is around
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